Hey! Great job with these poems. I really enjoyed reading your Twitter poem! It brought up a serious topic but also included some wit, nice! I enjoyed reading the Haiku poem and it is very interesting. My one critique is that I think you should add more poems! Overall, great job!
Your Haiku is so simple and yet is still making me think. I like that it is really making me wrap my head around it! I think that maybe adding more Haikus with the same train of thought would make it even more powerful. Your first tweet is so clever and it feels so true in the internet world today. Very clever!
I like how your haiku poem was not a simple message, rather left the reader looking for more. Perhaps because of this, you could maybe elaborate with more haikus. I like how you ended the second line with "but not" because it left the reader with a bit of suspense. I think your hashtag was very effective in bringing the poem together. I am not sure if the two were supposed to be connected with the use of trees, but either way, I liked it!
I really liked both your haiku and poem and the different moods they represent. I think the first poem was great at describing nature but maybe by placing a color or symbol of a season more such as orange for fall or white for snow will give it the kick it needs. the twitter poem is excellent and super clever and fun! great job!
Love the twitter poem-its a great social commentary on social media. It makes you think about what we're actually doing with social media. I also really enjoyed your haiku-its empowering. The tree part is also a subtle and nice connection to the season. I would love to see a few more haikus that connect to it.
Hey! Great job with these poems. I really enjoyed reading your Twitter poem! It brought up a serious topic but also included some wit, nice! I enjoyed reading the Haiku poem and it is very interesting. My one critique is that I think you should add more poems! Overall, great job!
ReplyDeleteYour Haiku is so simple and yet is still making me think. I like that it is really making me wrap my head around it! I think that maybe adding more Haikus with the same train of thought would make it even more powerful. Your first tweet is so clever and it feels so true in the internet world today. Very clever!
ReplyDeleteI like how your haiku poem was not a simple message, rather left the reader looking for more. Perhaps because of this, you could maybe elaborate with more haikus. I like how you ended the second line with "but not" because it left the reader with a bit of suspense.
ReplyDeleteI think your hashtag was very effective in bringing the poem together. I am not sure if the two were supposed to be connected with the use of trees, but either way, I liked it!
I really liked both your haiku and poem and the different moods they represent. I think the first poem was great at describing nature but maybe by placing a color or symbol of a season more such as orange for fall or white for snow will give it the kick it needs.
ReplyDeletethe twitter poem is excellent and super clever and fun!
great job!
Love the twitter poem-its a great social commentary on social media. It makes you think about what we're actually doing with social media. I also really enjoyed your haiku-its empowering. The tree part is also a subtle and nice connection to the season. I would love to see a few more haikus that connect to it.
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